..she fell in love with the drummer (xrebelheartx) wrote,
..she fell in love with the drummer
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I've spent the last nine months falling completely in love with poetry -- consequently, it's all I've been writing. I haven't taken a fiction class in almost two years, which is insane, and I miss it. There's a bit of a short story taking slow and uncertain form in my head, and I'd like to get it down before the MFA program starts, because that will mean all nonfiction, all the time.

Anyway, this is from the best class I had during my undergrad career -- last semester's Advanced Poetry. It's a sestina, which is like the Rubik's Cube of poetry forms. (Let's see if I still remember how to do a cut, shall we?)



August in Sestina


Sandy paths snaked through the great blonde
stalks of the wetlands, where your arm anchored firm and still
across my back. We walked far
enough for you to tell me that the inlet
we splashed through earlier was maybe
actually sewage and that you’d always

kind of disliked me, which of course ensured that we would always
be friends. Here we are so young and you – pale blonde
and fervent-skinned – were made for, maybe
even made from, this coastline – carved out of infinite stars sticking still
and tangled below your chest between breathing out and breathing in. Let
the red sun pop the sky like a vessel, splitting it deep and far

down the middle. In the glare I’ll follow you till we’re too far
out to stand, till the waves stop breaking, till blue unravels all ways—
under and above us. We built hips on this inlet,
floating on our backs, and in the distance dug for blonde
sandcrabs with savage grabbing fingers and patient palms. They scuttled, then were still.
We are twelve or maybe

seventeen—our growth plates fused here, and maybe
trapped within them bits of quartz and broken clamshells, so that this place is never far-
ther than your collarbone, your slinging wrist. Clouds suspend, hanging nearly still
above the lazy glimmering shore, but in fact they’re always
drifting, beyond our languid reeds and the dunes highlighted honey blonde
and silky platinum. Yellow sails too toss along the inlet

in broad certain bounds. At high tide on clear nights, the inlet
quivers into the bay, flooding the dock so we can stand up to our ankles or maybe
even our calves. Behind us, blonde
streetlights straighten the slouching town, extinguished only in the far-
off ascent of morning. I watch you sideways and wonder how you are always
so steady when these wooden planks tremble, when nighttime is never quite still.

You taught me about waves, how to flip into the break and hold my breathing still.
You belong to this inlet,
more than the chipped white lifeguard chairs and more than the echoes I’ve always
heard rustling down the coast (they make sounds like yes and sometimes maybe).
Listen well: don’t go so far
away. Here not even the sun is as blinding as your blonde.


We are some hard and narrow age. I am still blonde and we sculpt a miniature
golf course by the edge of the inlet – maybe so that someday, I’ll find it fits
into a poem about how I knew it would be you there at the far end of always.


I'm thisclose to registering for the Philly Marathon -- I'm already signed up for the half, and my ex-professor (which I suppose makes her my friend?) gave me the training program that she uses. She wants me to try to qualify for Boston, which is hysterical, but apparently Philly is almost completely flat. That makes me think it's slightly less impossible while still being totally impossible.
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There's a bit of a short story taking slow and uncertain form in my head,

YAY!!! :D

Wow, the metaphors are just gorgeous on that poem. Going back and forth between the land setting and the person/relationship. And the varied use of "blonde" as an adjective...that's beautiful. :D

I can see why you love it, though -- reminds me of the beauty of your writing. :)
Oh goodness -- that's especially lovely to hear, especially because it is my poem ;) I totally didn't make that clear at all, but thank you, dude! You are incredibly sweet.
Ahh, no wonder it was beautiful (and sorry for not realizing it was yours, eek!!)

Wow, I'm so glad you posted that. :D And I'm so glad I read it. :)
hey there,
that poem was amazing. i'm always taken aback when someone rocks a sestina.
i think you should do the boston marathon, but only in pearls, of course.
if you ever come up this way, let me know. you, me, and claire should get a drink.
hey, thank you! please believe, i carried that thing around with me for weeks.
doing the boston marathon requires a) doing the philly marathon, and b) doing the philly marathon in 3 hours and 40 minutes. if by some miracle that happens, i'll definitely let you know.